Explanation writing T4

This is my explanation writing for Term 4. Our prompt was to write to describe one environmental problem and explain what people can do to reduce its impact on the planet. I think I did better this time because I have better spelling, grammar and punctuation. You could give me tips in the comments on how to improve my explanation writing. Here they are:

      Old one:

              What a good friend is

Have you ever wondered what a good friend is?

Well a good friend is someone who looks after you,

has fun with you and you can protect each other from

the bullies around the school. Good means you are a kind, loving  person.

Firstly, having a good friend is great because they can

look after you. So when your hurt your friend will take you and look after. Also when your feeling down

they can make you feel better by cheering you up.

Secondly, having the best friend is awesome because

they have fun with you. Having fun is good because

having fun is important when you are a kid. When your

sitting around on your own your awesomely best

friend comes along tells some jokes with you.

Finally, when you have a good friend you can protect

each other from the school bullies. So if a bully says

something mean to a friend then you can protect them or they can protect you.

So having a good friend is great because they can look

after you by cheering you up if your down. Having the

best friend is awesome because they have fun with

you by joking around and telling jokes. Also when you have a good friend beside you can protect each other when you get bullied.  

New one:

Pollution

Do you have any ideas on how to solve pollution on the planet? Well if not this explanation is full of ideas how solve the planets pollution. A problem is where for example you are mowing your lawn and the lawn mower breaks. That is when you have a problem. Environmental means relating to the natural world and the impact of human activity on its condition.

One thing someone could do is reduce their use of fossil fuel. We burn coal, oil, natural gas, and gasoline to produce electricity and power our vehicles. When we do this we are creating fossil fuel. Fossil fuel is useful but very very bad to earth.

A second thing someone could do is recycle everything you can. You can recycle: Glass bottles, jars, paper, cardboard, milk bottles, ice-cream containers, margarine and yogurt containers. You can also recycle aluminium, such as soft drink cans and foil trays and steel cans. By recycling everything you can, you are helping the planet.

The last thing someone could do is reduce the use of plastic bags. Not all plastic is recyclable, you know. Because plastic bags aren’t recyclable, we just put them in the bin. And when we put them in the bin, we just drop them. That causes it to get stuck on the top of the bin or not even go in at all. When we just drop it in it flies out when the wind comes and lands in the trees or the ocean. That is how earth is polluted.

So, to stop pollution we can reduce their use of fossil fuels, recycle everything you can and reduce the use of plastic bags. I really do hope that my explanation has given you some thoughts about trying to stop pollution. I am not saying you have to, i’m just giving you ideas.

By Georgia